1. The lead describes a typical restaurant dishwasher. It shows how the restaurant workers are treating unfairly.
2. The restaurant industry exploding and the income gap widening.
3. She dismisses the argument that the low wages represent a market-driven distribution of labor by saying waiters make poverty wages, go to public aid, and make Americans subsidize the restaurant industry.
4. She said that after higher wages in California, the number of restaurant jobs is supposed to increase by 9.1 percent.
5. She says that restaurant workers make up 10% of the workforce, and a disproportionate number of low-wage workers.
6. Customers should argue for more rights for workers. Lawmakers should reject the demands of the National Restaurant Association.
7. They made the "tipped minimum wage", which allows restaurants to pay workers $2.63 thinking they will get at least $8 per hour from tips.
8.They blame low wages and poor conditions on slim profit margins.
9.She says raising wages everywhere won't change the competition.
10. They don't get paid enough with just one job.
11. He was mistreated in his restaurant job so it provides the view of someone who has been in that position.
12. Restaurants are involved in wage theft.
13. Massachusetts' restaurants owed $1.7 million to workers because of wage theft.
14. She says the mayor should streamline the permitting process and help stop wage theft.
15. She shows a way to help restaurant workers and convinces the reader it will work. I think it is effective. It isn't like other conclusions I have written.
1. But how is it an effective lead?
ReplyDelete3. No, she says specifically that California guaranteed a minimum wage and restaurant jobs increased.
4. OK, you actually answered the second part of No. 3 here. Good. But she makes a lot of other appeals as counter arguments after the California example.
5. She offers at least five more compelling stats after this one.
9. So everyone will be able to survive because everyone is playing by the same rules.
12. How does she break wage theft down?
13. Good but over what period of time?
14. Also wants him to prevent permit renewal for restaurant owners who practice wage theft.
15. Good but what about the single-sentence paragraph at the end? That's where the concluding happens. :)
You've done better on these in the past, and I trust you will do better in the future. You kind of mailed this one in.
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